Chapter Title: Painted Faces and Long Hair
Perspective: Simon
What a day.
What happened today was almost a miracle. See, We find a boat in the sea and we thought it was our chance to finally get off this island. Then we noticed that there is no fire nor smoke. Ralph was now very angry that Jack and his hunters let it out. We find Jack and his hunters all in a circle being blatant. Chanting “Kill the Pig, Cut the throat, spill the blood” well, something like that.
Now Jack can't even speak right now that killed a pig. Jack was ONLY talking about how he killed the pig and how it happened. Till Ralph says there was a ship. Now Jack was upset. The kind of upset where you say something he'll be angry at you. I was just hoping nobody talked. But Piggy says he shouldn't have let the fire out. Wow, what bad timing he has. Jack was now angry at Piggy for no reason. That guy can be pretty belligerence once in a while.
Now he starts beating on Piggy and smacks Piggy malevolently on the head like how you would swat a fly with your hand. His specs flew across the ground. Landed near me so I picked it up and noticed that there was a side broken. Ralph says something bout a dirty trick and Jack apologizes. Now they light the fire again. They cook the pig till its skin was a bit swarthiness and give it to everyone but Piggy. Jack didn't give him any because he says that he didn't hunt. Piggy says no more than Ralph or Simon. Since I was sitting near Piggy I decided to give him some. Now Maurice broke the silence and says where did they find the pig. So Jack and his hunters start chanting the same thing before and says how much gouts of blood there were. What a day.
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3 comments:
I like how you are using your vocab. The pnly problem is you are writing in 3rd person. For instance "Jack didn't give him any because he says that he didn't hunt. Piggy says no more than Ralph or Simon." <<< should be Ralph and I.
i like your detail. it just i jhink your not writing as if you were your charcter your writeing as the 2nd person i think thats all i have to say other then that its good.
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